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in my opinion "lewd though dour" is rather abstract. abstractness is the easiest mistake to make when writing haiku; it doesn't take much to tip over something that minute KS On 14/10/06, biloxi andersen <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > I have no problem with observing something in nature that seems > interesting and profound, I like and do that. I have no problem with > something being short, in fact, I like that. As an example, I wrote > this a while ago (no, I'm not saying it's a haiku - in fact, I > disliked haiku at the time) > > Cactus flower > Lewd though dour > > I liked the pieces you posted kaspar, but, to what extent is the form > in haiku rigid? Why must they be 3 lines? > > Take my piece for example, two lines four syllable each. If I were to > make it into a haiku would I have had to make it 3 lines? That I > would've detested. (I'm not sure if I would've had to deleted that > "lewd though dour" too). > > On 10/14/06, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > especially liked 'Learn to Read #2', thanks a lot Andrew. > > > > KS > > > > On 14/10/06, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > > Haiku > > > (Linfen) > > > > > > at night, fireworks. > > > at dawn, torn red paper shells > > > dye the gutters pink > > > > > > 18/08/2006 > > > > > > > > > An interesting site: http://users.mullum.com.au/jbird/jb_astart_PART3.html > > > > > > > > -- > Her Lust is Wiser is a book of verse by Biloxi Andersen and Ziad > Noureddine. It is part of ongoing diaries. > http://inkatthedevil.blogspot.com/ >