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> Actually, it seems to be based on the pentameter, with prosy flattening > as in the 2nd line, which is not inappropriate. Agree. The problem with the pentameter is that it can so easily drift into prose, without the right charge it ceases to be the heroic line but shambles into a stumbling walking gait, like the Wordsworth of The Excursion. Btw Larence posted a Snap on a Tuesday, and I'm sure he knew it wasn't Wednesday. Talk about ownership and control: phew. Best Dave ----- Original Message ----- From: "MJ Walker" <[log in to unmask]> To: <[log in to unmask]> Sent: Tuesday, May 23, 2006 12:23 PM Subject: Re: Snap > Actually, it seems to be based on the pentameter, with prosy flattening > as in the 2nd line, which is not inappropriate. I don't understand > "uprouted" or the awkwardness of the next line; the shifting levels of > discourse combined with the recurrent iambic beat have something > hypnotic. As a snap (not a finished painting) it's quite suggestive. > mjay > David Bircumshaw wrote: > > >Prose. > > > > > >----- Original Message ----- > >From: "Lawrence Upton" <[log in to unmask]> > >To: <[log in to unmask]> > >Sent: Tuesday, May 23, 2006 11:55 AM > >Subject: Snap > > > > > >Is there a river here? It's not nearby. > >The land's been flattened out, where that's possible. > >One guesses where the valley might be left. > >There is no pattern to the dreary streets > > > >uprouted around new locked building. > >Much hangs where it was standing when death came. > >Perhaps all these walking now arrived > >later, though this morning they seem undead: > > > >a mode of simulation, a programme to be followed, > >a program without "me", a code, a fool's idea. > >It is a muddle of a foreign field > >the provenance of which might be unknown. > > > > > > > > -- > Onko onni unta vain?