Sheila
I love the title-- it draws me in, immediately and encourages me to read more--
great enjambment betweenI was tired and you
were tired and wind
Almost as if the narrator were were tired of "you" as well (implied) and wind seemed to act m the line as wind and also perhaps as "wind" as in winding up or winding down.
The ends f the lines are also telling in that they set up angst or a sense of hopelessness, a sense of the fantasy ending.
and you
and wind
we could not
in the dim
beyond sunset
time
to breathe
feeling once
remanded to
whether or not
fictitious summer
Really love the poem--
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On Tuesday, February 6, 2024 at 08:39:22 PM PST, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
I was tired and you
were tired and wind
blew blessings we could not
yet read I read myself
to sleep in the dim
hours beyond sunset
in which coastal meant time
to coast near frost to breathe
the slimmer feeling once
reeling from shoulder-
length amendments to
detachment remanded to
weather whether or not
gilded to fictitious summer
Sheila E. Murphy
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