Dear Sheila,
I feel very much, in this, the operation of the mind as it
investigates (and laments).
And can I just add – a bit at length – how I’m very struck by
its structure, the way it breaks down the page. I know this is a very
odd thing to note but I happened to be re-reading Emily Bronte’s
poem ‘Remembrance’ - literally - when this came into my email. In
that poem, as you may know, there is caesura in most lines that your
line breaks remind me of. And, yes, I know, of course, a line break is
not a caesura but it somehow chimes in this moment of my reading.
Also, in the Bronte, there are many line endings of double rhyme
(so-called feminine rhyme). Again, yours does not rhyme, though there
are hints of slant rhyme, but a number of the end words have
unstressed last syllables. So, that seemed to me to offer a similar
experience of shaped and slow-turned strong feeling, despite your
short lined stanzas.
Apologies if I seem a bit too focused on something you may never have
intended. It is a coincidence, or more than, that resonates with me in
this moment.
Thanks,
Jill
___________________________________________Jill Jones
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Subject:early snap
*It Was Always New*
And then nothing
could be lifted
no matter the muscle
or the will
The ground was all
and recollection maybe
feathered any softness
left to be imagined
Again as any number
of defeats were multiplied
times themselves now
fastened down and seen
And felt as though
no sky were ever here
for the duration
I had lived for
Sheila E. Murphy
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