Ah Bill it brought back many frustrating memories for me! And an unfulfilled pact!
Thanks for that
Andrew
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> On 17 Oct 2019, at 5:01 am, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Thanks, Doug. I suppose I did want that filmic sort of focus on the
> incident. Will think more about the early passive and the ending.
>
> Bill
>
> On Thu, 17 Oct 2019 at 2:13 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
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>> More a short film than a snapshot, Bill. Not sure about that passive in l
>> 4. Wondering how the teller now feels about the assumed male power play etc.
>>
>> Fizzles? No, but suggest an unsatisfying climax perhaps?
>>
>> Doug
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>>> On Oct 16, 2019, at 2:29 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
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>>> Thanks, Sheila.
>>>
>>> Foreplay, yes but does it fizzle out unsatisfyingly I wonder.
>>>
>>> Bill
>>>
>>> On Wed, 16 Oct 2019 at 8:35 am, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> How I hear you, Bill. Many elements brought in here. Lots of foreplay in
>>>> the narrative, as if to match the circumstance!
>>>> Thanks, Sheila
>>>>
>>>> On Tue, Oct 15, 2019 at 2:13 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> The challenge 8
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> O ask something else
>>>>>
>>>>> anything else
>>>>>
>>>>> My interrogator shook his head
>>>>>
>>>>> I was required to answer his question
>>>>>
>>>>> to answer it truthfully
>>>>>
>>>>> to answer it now
>>>>>
>>>>> in the presence
>>>>>
>>>>> short of family
>>>>>
>>>>> of all who I cared about most
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Truth or Dare
>>>>>
>>>>> Wilson’s Promontory
>>>>>
>>>>> 1974
>>>>>
>>>>> The interrogator
>>>>>
>>>>> my 18 year old best friend
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Have you
>>>>>
>>>>> he demanded
>>>>>
>>>>> welshed on our deal?
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> The deal
>>>>>
>>>>> a private compact
>>>>>
>>>>> to share with each other first
>>>>>
>>>>> the name and circumstances
>>>>>
>>>>> of our first coupling
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> And he had kept his part of the bargain
>>>>>
>>>>> a year or so before
>>>>>
>>>>> gushing about Italian Anita
>>>>>
>>>>> the supermarket packer
>>>>>
>>>>> who on the back doormat
>>>>>
>>>>> of the closed physics block at our school
>>>>>
>>>>> had expunged the hated V stain
>>>>>
>>>>> from his rampant person
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> The dare?
>>>>>
>>>>> Jump through the plate glass window
>>>>>
>>>>> of our Tidal River holiday lodge
>>>>>
>>>>> School was out forever
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Well if you really want to know
>>>>>
>>>>> with whom I rode the 48 tram
>>>>>
>>>>> all the way to the city
>>>>>
>>>>> sadly the answer is
>>>>>
>>>>> never yet
>>>>>
>>>>> and with no one
>>>>>
>>>>> O I have gone a few stops
>>>>>
>>>>> been down to Dickens Supermarket
>>>>>
>>>>> on Doncaster Road
>>>>>
>>>>> and further along High St
>>>>>
>>>>> as far as Kew junction
>>>>>
>>>>> and once
>>>>>
>>>>> I even got down Bridge Road
>>>>>
>>>>> all the way to Punt
>>>>>
>>>>> but the city of dreams
>>>>>
>>>>> at this stage
>>>>>
>>>>> has been a bridge too far
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Happy now?
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> I would have kept my end of the bargain
>>>>>
>>>>> if I had had anything to report
>>>>>
>>>>> But I had not
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> until the night before
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> and now the very vanquisher
>>>>>
>>>>> of my virginity
>>>>>
>>>>> lips pursed
>>>>>
>>>>> eyes fox-alert
>>>>>
>>>>> curled up in a beanbag
>>>>>
>>>>> in front of me as I spoke
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> or failed to speak
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Bleary with beer
>>>>>
>>>>> I could no more come up with a transport metaphor
>>>>>
>>>>> than I could quote Thomas Hardy
>>>>>
>>>>> who might have replied
>>>>>
>>>>> that the answer lies in
>>>>>
>>>>> The abyss of undiscoverable things
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> What actually happened
>>>>>
>>>>> I simply clammed up
>>>>>
>>>>> and the ‘game’ fizzled out
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> bw
>>>>>
>>>>> 16.10.19
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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