Thanks, all. I was happier with the first too, despite, as you say, Andrew,
its unhaiku-ness.
Bill
On Thu, 29 Aug 2019 at 3:29 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Yes, I like the first one - but would argue with the term 'haiku' for them.
> Haiku is more than form. But that's an argument for another day!
>
> Andrew
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> On Thu, 29 Aug 2019 at 00:36, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
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> > really love that first one, Bill. These are nice! Sheila
> >
> > On Wed, Aug 28, 2019 at 9:18 AM Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
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> > > I like them both, Bill, but feel the first keeps its mystery while th
> 2nd
> > > slides a bit into didactic in the final lineā¦
> > >
> > > Doug
> > >
> > > > On Aug 27, 2019, at 8:28 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
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> > > > What if waves,
> > > >
> > > > seeing the shore,
> > > >
> > > > decide not to break
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Foaming lines erupt
> > > >
> > > > from billowing depths
> > > >
> > > > - fresh ideas
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> > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
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> > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
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