Thank you, Bill. You have given me things to think about with your good
reading, and I appreciate this. I like what emerges from successive
readings as you have shown. Sheila
On Fri, Jan 11, 2019 at 3:14 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Interesting structure, Sheila. I had thought on first reading that the
> quality of light was weak, wheat, unthreatening but I see now you probably
> mean the colour of the suit does the calming. Anyway the threads notion
> works well. Not sure of final ‘also’. How would it be to interrupt the
> parenthetical pattern and just drop it for the final line?
>
> Bill
>
> On Fri, 11 Jan 2019 at 11:36 am, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > His suit (wheat light)
> >
> > Calms me (if I work)
> >
> > All night (threads connect)
> >
> > Winter teaches (overtones relax)
> >
> >
> >
> > Are we a river (pleasure)
> >
> > When together (principally)
> >
> > In the open (alert unharmed)
> >
> > The surface smoothed (also)
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > Sheila Murphy
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