Hi Doug,
Thanks for your thoughts. From some poetry ideas I've been trying out
(again) in the snapping vein.
And I'll sure think on that phrase.
Best,Jill
___________________________________________Jill Jones
----- Original Message -----
From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics"
To:
Cc:
Sent:Wed, 19 Dec 2018 09:29:58 -0700
Subject:Re: Snap: Paths
I like the stretch of gathering perceptions here Jill. All taken in.
(I think I[d drop the ‘there are’ in stanza 5, but otherwise, a
beaut.
Doug
> On Dec 19, 2018, at 6:07 AM, Jill Jones wrote:
>
>
>
> Paths
>
> Early afternoon stretches along the street.
>
> Honeyeaters cling onto wires.
>
>
>
> My footsteps are buried in the pavement
>
> like a prayer that never surfaces.
>
>
>
> The light within light contracts and travels.
>
> Half-remembered cadences roll over a fence.
>
>
>
> The hour seems to drape.
>
> Trees invent shadow.
>
>
>
> A jet’s underside pushes into the west.
>
> Nearby there are birds that will soon fly north.
>
>
>
> Concrete slowly flakes
>
> as if it’s also going somewhere.
>
> ___________________________________________Jill Jones
>
>
>
>
########################################################################
>
> To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link:
> https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1
Douglas Barbour
[log in to unmask]
https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Listen. If (UofAPress):
Oh, goddamnit, we forgot the silent prayer.
Dwight D, Eisenhower
[at a cabinet meeting]
########################################################################
To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link:
https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1
########################################################################
To unsubscribe from the POETRYETC list, click the following link:
https://www.jiscmail.ac.uk/cgi-bin/webadmin?SUBED1=POETRYETC&A=1
|