Hi Bill,
Yes, this moves nicely, very butterfly-ish.
I do like the spring/flickering sonic connection
I still wonder if you need 'the'.
Thanks,Jill
___________________________________________Jill Jones
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Thanks, Sheila.
Amended slightly now:
spring lightweight
in the flickering sun
- a butterfly
bw
19.12.18
On Wed, 19 Dec 2018 at 11:23 am, Sheila Murphy
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> lovely, Bill. Thank you!
>
> On Tue, Dec 18, 2018 at 4:04 PM Bill Wootton
> wrote:
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> > spring lightweight
> >
> > in flickering sun
> >
> > - butterfly
> >
> >
> > bw
> >
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