cheers Bill
On 19/12/2018 09:20, Bill Wootton wrote:
> I can see merit in your version, Patrick, thanks. It’s more concise but
> might sound like a series of announcements. I tried, in my second version,
> by adding articles, to slow it down in lines 2 and 3 and not make it sound
> so stilted.
>
> Bill
>
> On Wed, 19 Dec 2018 at 8:09 pm, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Hi just up here good to see snaps ! looking at this discussion with
>> Sheila and Bill
>>
>> where's my snap-poem ?
>>
>> I wondered lightweight seems bit bogged down with words may I
>> tentatively float! fly!
>>
>> spring lightweight
>>
>> flickering sun
>>
>> butterfly
>>
>>
>> On 19/12/2018 04:03, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>>> Even better, Bill!
>>>
>>> On Tue, Dec 18, 2018, 8:58 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
>> wrote:
>>>> Thanks, Sheila.
>>>>
>>>> Amended slightly now:
>>>>
>>>> spring lightweight
>>>>
>>>> in the flickering sun
>>>>
>>>> - a butterfly
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> bw
>>>>
>>>> 19.12.18
>>>>
>>>> On Wed, 19 Dec 2018 at 11:23 am, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> lovely, Bill. Thank you!
>>>>>
>>>>> On Tue, Dec 18, 2018 at 4:04 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> spring lightweight
>>>>>>
>>>>>> in flickering sun
>>>>>>
>>>>>> - butterfly
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> bw
>>>>>>
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