Interesting, Doug and loomy, gloomy. Could almost be the dark cousin of
Jill’s piece. I like the choice of ‘swift’, which for me, works just as
well as an adjective as a cobbled verb. ‘thrown outlines’ also works well.
Just wonder: do you need ‘are they’?
Bill
On Thu, 20 Dec 2018 at 3:42 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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> but three shadows swift
> across sand as if
> sails not
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> of something huge
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