Patrick, I really like this and agree that absent-mindedly’ is a better
choice than ‘pedantically’. However would you consider removing lines two
and three? This could focus on that absent-mindedness. You could still
leave the title as ’But’.
Bill
On Wed, 21 Nov 2018 at 9:41 pm, Patrick McManus <
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> BUT
>
> absent-mindedly
> but
> rather critically
> she corrected
> the spelling
> and
> punctuation
> of his suicide note
> before telephoning
> for the ambulance
> and police
>
>
> pmcmanus
> s384
> I did think of using pedantically but absent-mindedly
>
> has that sense of being in a state of shock (maybe )
>
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