So ...
Such a fluid thing
in dreams and memories
people seem so preoccupied
going about their business
What’s mine?
Is this what you are suggesting, Barry? Can see merit if so but not sure
about the preposition use in line 2.
Bill
On Wed, 14 Nov 2018 at 2:13 pm, Barry Alpert <
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> Bill, After a number of readings, I've decided to take the title as the
> first line in a single-spaced unit with "in dreams and memories". Then
> double-spacing between units and the current lines 2 & 3 as another unit. A
> final double-space between stanzas and then your final line. Barry
>
> On Tue, 13 Nov 2018 17:07:42 -0700, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> >The question of questions, Bill. A brave one.
> >
> >On Tue, Nov 13, 2018, 4:42 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
> wrote:
> >
> >> In dreams and memories
> >>
> >> people seem so preoccupied
> >>
> >> going about their business
> >>
> >> What’s mine?
> >>
> >>
> >> bw
> >>
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