Thanks, Doug. I revisited this poem just recently (started in 2015) which
seemed to start with a head of steam, a noticing, as you say, but runs out
of puff a bit as I extend it to sonnet length.
Bill
On Thu, 27 Sep 2018 at 1:19 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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> A godo noticing, Bill, & true.
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> I note as well some pure Aussie lingo…
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> Doug
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> > On Sep 26, 2018, at 5:23 AM, Patrick McManus <
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> > Cheers Bill all that very touching
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> > P Pinching and Pawing -hoho
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> > On 25/09/2018 22:41, Bill Wootton wrote:
> >> Driving behind cars, you see them clearly,
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> >> ranged across glossy duco on boot lids.
> >>
> >> Finger marks. As if some brute tune
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> >> were to be wrung from mere metal.
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> >> Where once a centrally positioned
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> >> handle sucked all hands to its chrome vortex,
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> >> now rear closure begins flathandedly
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> >> from anywhere along that closing rim.
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> >> Once you'd be roared at for touching
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> >> any such fine surface, metal or glass.
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> >> Today digits glide for hours over phones
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> >> and tablets. We pinch and paw at screens,
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> >> knowing all the while that gropes and smudges
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> >> may be wiped away with a damp cloth.
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> >> bw
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