Thanks Pat, Doug. Three speakers within my snap, none of them Coltrane in his own voice. I couldn't work with the diction of Coltrane spoken by actor Denzel Washington. Pat, I heard that first line ["country-bumpkin-looking guy"] and edited. Doug, when I left the movie theatre having written down 4 potential lines in the dark, I didn't think I had enough for a poem. Then I looked at it yesterday and made a few lucky decisions in the realms of punctuation and syntax. Not intentionally minimal--I don't remember why I abandoned the 11-line acrostic & went intuitive. Barry
Thu, 17 May 2018 08:09:04 +0100, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>enjoyed country bumpkin rearranging molecular structure! cheers P
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>On 16/05/2018 21:25, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>> Caught some good lines there, Barry. From the sheets of sound to this minimalism...
>>
>> Doug
>>
>>> On May 16, 2018, at 10:49 AM, Barry Alpert <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> CHASING TRANE
>>>
>>>
>>> "Country-bumpkin"
>>> trying to best himself . . .
>>>
>>> So many musical inclusions /
>>> sound rearranged molecular structure . . .
>>>
>>>
>>> Barry Alpert / Silver Spring MD / 5-8-18 (7:15pm) >>5-16-18 (12:26pm)
>>>
>>> Via the 2017 documentary on John Coltrane directed by John Scheinfeld. Here's the trailer:
>>>
>>> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PaR9V7fMamk
>> Douglas Barbour
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>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
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>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
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>>
>> There is no real
>> world, my friends.
>> Why not, then
>> let the stars
>> shine in our bones?
>>
>> Robert Kroetsch
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