Thanks, Doug.
The second part now looks like this. My wife pointed out that a fox’s tail
cannot ‘splay’ as such.
An otherworld visitor
daintily trotting
from eucalypt shade
down earth's stony path
swishless tail almost
independent accomplice
From where does all that
red swagger spring?
Bill
On Thu, 19 Apr 2018 at 12:32 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Bill
>
> I agree with Jill about the first stanza really boring its magic, & I’d
> get rid of the doggie reference in the 2nd, for one thing it has to be a
> small dog, right?. The speed of the turns marking the fox’s movements is
> neatly done.
>
> & Jill, thanks for the references.
>
> Doug
>
> > On Apr 17, 2018, at 11:19 PM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > Also, Bill, meant to mention that a good friend of mine, the Scots but
> > now South Australian poet, Alison Flett, has written a series of poems
> > about foxes.
> >
> > This was the only one I could find available online:
> >
> > http://littlewindowspress.com/index.php/fox-1-umvelt/
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Jill
> >
> >
> > ________________________
> > Jill Jones
> > www.jilljones.com.au
> >
> > Latest book: Brink, Five Islands Press
> > http://fiveislandspress.com/catalogue/brink-jill-jones
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics"
> > To:
> > Cc:
> > Sent:Wed, 18 Apr 2018 09:35:54 +1000
> > Subject:Fox
> >
> > *Fox*
> >
> > 1
> >
> > The thing is,
> >
> > can you even be sure
> >
> > you saw it?
> >
> > That even-haunched
> >
> > cool stepper,
> >
> > intent
> >
> > as a gunslinger.
> >
> > Now definitely
> >
> > not there.
> >
> > 2
> >
> > Despite dog dimensions
> >
> > he moves undoglike-ly
> >
> > An otherworld visitor
> >
> > daintily trotting
> >
> > from eucalypt shade
> >
> > down earth's stony path
> >
> > splayed tail almost
> >
> > independent accomplice
> >
> > From where does all that
> >
> > red swagger spring?
> >
> > bw
> >
> > 18.4.18
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>
>
> There is no real
> world, my friends.
> Why not, then
> let the stars
> shine in our bones?
>
> Robert Kroetsch
>
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