Hi Sheila,
Thanks for this (oddly I didn't receive the original post so bouncing
off Doug's).
I really liked the movement in this, particularly the sonic movement
within stanzas (alliteration, assonance). And the various ideas of
movement and making (navigating, recording, stretching). Also, and
maybe it's just me and thus unintended, I liked the echo from
Transtromer - 'the half-finished heaven' (in one translation, the Bly
I think).
Best,
Jill
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Ooh, I love this version of a poetic dialogue, Sheila, & the way the
questions open up the responses. Especially the hibiscus. Maybe, as
they all become pertinent in the exchange. Stretching to that
‘halfway finished place’ as a poetics, perhaps…
Doug
> On Apr 2, 2018, at 11:53 PM, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>
> *Do I give up on making what I want?*.
> It is already here. Now to navigate
> each pilgrimage of thought,
> where patterns take turns self-disclosing.
>
> *Can hibiscus preen without a personality?*
> I thought so for an hour
> before you came. Then we had things to cover
> beyond zeal and yield.
>
> *Do the neighbors hear themselves erasing silence?*
> Maybe they're a mere recording
> of what will go away,
> Dreams make language obsolete
>
> *How many altitudes can be arranged at first light?*
> I strive for higher elevation,
> Stretch to find my pace, to reach
> a tall and halfway finished place.
>
> Sheila E. Murphy
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