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On 13/11/2017 07:29, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> what about them?
>
> L
>
> On 8 November 2017 at 17:42, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
>> shame that the rich do not enrich our soils but tax havens ??
>>
>>
>> On 08/11/2017 15:30, Lawrence Upton wrote:
>>
>>> I understand.
>>>
>>> I tried to second guess it but could not...
>>>
>>> I think I'll sidestep "now". I have been trying to avoid its affectionate
>>> embrace through several other poems today. But what about "And", the
>>> biblical and rather than the comma substitute?
>>>
>>> I'll think on this and make my final.... my new version on Thursday or
>>> Friday
>>>
>>> Thank you for the thought
>>>
>>>
>>> L
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On 8 November 2017 at 15:17, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>> Not looking carefully, L. I meant ‘Now’ for ‘Yet’. Sorry. )I’d like to
>>>> claim ‘typo,’ but it’s just plain dumb.)
>>>>
>>>> D
>>>>
>>>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 8:15 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Your inferences are almost certainly correct, Sir.
>>>>> & I am open to suggestions. My difficulty is that the word "if" does not
>>>>> occur in my poem.
>>>>>
>>>>> ?
>>>>>
>>>>> L
>>>>>
>>>>> On 8 November 2017 at 15:08, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Ah, yes, I like some implied ironies there, Lawrence (well, I infer
>>>>> such),
>>>>> as well as the stated possibilities. (I wonder if another ‘Now’ instead
>>>>> of
>>>>> ‘If’ in the final stanza would hit a bit harder?)
>>>>>> Doug
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 2:26 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> We've made revolution!
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Now we have a vision,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> we'll surely come to good.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> We had been doing much
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> who were put to make goods
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> which made few others rich.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Those rich are not like us.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Not now. Not any more.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Each one of them is changed.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Yet they enrich soils,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> doing something for *us*,
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> with no effort-making.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>>>>>>
>>>>> Continuations
>>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>>>
>>>>>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>>
>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>>>
>>>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>>>
>>>>
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