shame that the rich do not enrich our soils but tax havens ??
On 08/11/2017 15:30, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> I understand.
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> I tried to second guess it but could not...
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> I think I'll sidestep "now". I have been trying to avoid its affectionate
> embrace through several other poems today. But what about "And", the
> biblical and rather than the comma substitute?
>
> I'll think on this and make my final.... my new version on Thursday or
> Friday
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> Thank you for the thought
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> L
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> On 8 November 2017 at 15:17, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Not looking carefully, L. I meant ‘Now’ for ‘Yet’. Sorry. )I’d like to
>> claim ‘typo,’ but it’s just plain dumb.)
>>
>> D
>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 8:15 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>> Your inferences are almost certainly correct, Sir.
>>> & I am open to suggestions. My difficulty is that the word "if" does not
>>> occur in my poem.
>>>
>>> ?
>>>
>>> L
>>>
>>> On 8 November 2017 at 15:08, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>> Ah, yes, I like some implied ironies there, Lawrence (well, I infer
>> such),
>>>> as well as the stated possibilities. (I wonder if another ‘Now’ instead
>> of
>>>> ‘If’ in the final stanza would hit a bit harder?)
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 2:26 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>> We've made revolution!
>>>>>
>>>>> Now we have a vision,
>>>>>
>>>>> we'll surely come to good.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> We had been doing much
>>>>>
>>>>> who were put to make goods
>>>>>
>>>>> which made few others rich.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Those rich are not like us.
>>>>>
>>>>> Not now. Not any more.
>>>>>
>>>>> Each one of them is changed.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Yet they enrich soils,
>>>>>
>>>>> doing something for *us*,
>>>>>
>>>>> with no effort-making.
>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>>
>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>> Continuations
>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>
>>>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>>>
>>>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> [log in to unmask]
>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
>> 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>
>>
>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>
>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>
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