Me too, impressed with this belted out ballade, Dominic. My favourite lines:
melter-down of mettle/that fuzzed the meter, turned the water weird
Bill
On Tue, 3 Oct 2017 at 12:00 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> A good run at it yes some spirited lines. I read for a lit quarterly and
> it is equal to a lot of submitted work!
>
> Sent from my iPhone
>
> > On 2 Oct 2017, at 10:58 pm, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > There are lines I like a lot too, Dominic. A good quick run at it.
> >
> > Doug
> >> On Oct 2, 2017, at 7:33 AM, Dominic Fox <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>
> >> They had it by the throat; it croaked a little
> >> advertising jingle, then expired
> >> into unceasing light and heat of battle,
> >> a bitch of a surprise, that briskly flared
> >> then turned on its devices and reviewed
> >> its options with a snickering disdain
> >> as if out of that throat a voice had blared,
> >> long past, that there was everything to gain -
> >>
> >> and that was bad, a melter-down of mettle
> >> that fuzzed the meter, turned the water weird,
> >> declared itself a belter but was brittle
> >> (if not as fettlesome as we had feared).
> >> We flopped down on the deck, the fish we'd speared
> >> still flapping, a wet universe of pain,
> >> as over the horizon it appeared
> >> again that there was everything to gain
> >>
> >> by camouflage of selves among the cattle,
> >> by persiflage among the newly-squired;
> >> by marriage, though we had no wish to settle
> >> into squaredom and our hearts were coolly fired
> >> by slow-combusting sacrilege. We fared
> >> no better in that universe of strain
> >> than had our ancestors, who yet inferred,
> >> despite all, that they'd everything to gain.
> >>
> >> A creeping pox on all whom kings have sired
> >> is heritance, the weevil in the grain
> >> yet multiplying, as his sire required,
> >> avowing that there was everything to gain.
> >>
> >>
> >> ---
> >>
> >>
> >> Tim Thornton posted one of these on Facebook, and various people said
> >> they'd have a go, so I joined in. It's silly (I just went for it,
> without
> >> thinking particularly hard about what I was saying or why), but there
> are
> >> some lines I like a lot.
> >>
> >>
> >> D
> >
> > Douglas Barbour
> > [log in to unmask]
> > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >
> > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
> > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >
> > There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
> >
> > Sir Charles Petrie
>
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