Great rhythmic dance. T'would be fine if it circled like a spinning wheel -
it's impossible to print it as a moving wheel but it would be good to imply
it by the typesetting.
Andrew
On 19 October 2017 at 14:17, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Doug,
>
> This is lovely in its turning and the syllabic opening out then
> falling back - and great last line
>
> Jill
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> Subject:snap another small song
>
> turn turn frostburn
> red & yellow leaves yearn
> toward their defeat
> retreat repeat
> slow the fall to
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
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> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>
> Sir Charles Petrie
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>
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Andrew
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