Great story - but is it in the poem, Bill? Are you asking too much of the
reader (Death of the Author and all that notwithstanding)?
Adrew
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On 12 July 2017 at 15:26, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Quite a story, Bill. I like the idea, and I agree with your placing a
> stanza break just to help us reflect on the observations.
>
> Great! Sheila
>
> On Wed, Jul 12, 2017 at 12:20 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > One of my earlies memories, Andrew, Sheila, me in cot, waking in the
> > aftenoon to hear and see a man snoozing on a single bed on the far wall.
> > 'Uncle Tom', was brother of 'Aunt Nance', my young parents' landlady in a
> > double storey house in Glenroy, a suburb of Melbourne. For years I
> wondered
> > why Tom would choose to snooze in 'my' room. Only recently did it occur
> to
> > me that it was probably his bedroom and Mum had parked me in thee for a
> > snoze while she chatted with Nance. Tried in poem to pick up the
> > unsettledness/surprise/fear. Maybe stanza break after 'flatbacked'?
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On Wed, 12 Jul 2017 at 2:00 PM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> >
> > > Mysterious, indeed, Bill. One is attuned.
> > >
> > > On Tue, Jul 11, 2017 at 7:52 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > >
> > > > Mysterious man-behind-bars! Do you want to unwrap it for us?
> > > >
> > > > Andrew
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> > > > On 12 July 2017 at 09:18, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> > > >
> > > > > wake small
> > > > > big room
> > > > > behind bars
> > > > > man snores
> > > > > sour smell
> > > > > why mum
> > > > > he there
> > > > > flatbacked
> > > > > never asked
> > > > > just occurred
> > > > > maybe I
> > > > > put there
> > > > > his room
> > > > > all along
> > > > >
> > > > > bw
> > > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > --
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> >
>
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