Always a pleasure, Andrew!
On Jun 22, 2017 7:15 PM, "Andrew Burke" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Exactly, Sheila - that's how his life goes. Thank you for that perceptive
> reading.
>
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> On 23 June 2017 at 09:46, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> > I like this, Andrew. It brings forward a kind of present tense that does
> > not release its past.
> >
> > On Thu, Jun 22, 2017 at 6:21 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> >
> > > Just now I passed
> > > your past address,
> > > a hollow among
> > > bushes by the railway.
> > >
> > > Now you live
> > > in the former
> > > half-way house
> > > yet walk city streets
> > > like the homeless
> > > you once lived among
> > >
> > > the pavement
> > > alleys and buildings
> > > somehow still
> > > shape your life
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> > > On 22 June 2017 at 23:15, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> > >
> > > > Not quite that bad, Andrew, but I also noticed that ‘passed’, &
> wonder
> > > how
> > > > you might either find another line to make 2 couplets out of that
> > tercet,
> > > > or else not worry about stanza breaks at all, at least so ordered
> then
> > > > broken once. The observation keeps.
> > > >
> > > > Doug
> > > > > On Jun 22, 2017, at 5:35 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > > > >
> > > > > Yes, it's shit Bill. I'll tighten it and fiddle with 'passed' and
> > > 'past'
> > > > > ... An unedited snap from my busy brain :-)
> > > > >
> > > > > Andrew
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> > > > > On 22 June 2017 at 18:19, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> > > wrote:
> > > > >
> > > > >> Line one's 'passed' is odd to me, Andrew. And why the tercet among
> > the
> > > > >> couplets? Otherwise this is of interest, the idea of shapes'
> effect
> > on
> > > > >> lives.
> > > > >>
> > > > >> Bill
> > > > >>
> > > > >> On Thu, 22 Jun 2017 at 2:14 PM, Andrew Burke <
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> > > > wrote:
> > > > >>
> > > > >>> I drive passed
> > > > >>> your past address
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> a hollow among
> > > > >>> bushes by the railway
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> now you live
> > > > >>> full time
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> in the former
> > > > >>> half-way house
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> yet walk the city streets
> > > > >>> like the homeless
> > > > >>> you once lived among
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> the pavement
> > > > >>> alleys and buildings
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> somehow shape
> > > > >>> your life
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>>
> > > > >>> --
> > > > >>> Andrew
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> > > > > --
> > > > > Andrew
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> > > > Douglas Barbour
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> > > > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> > > >
> > > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> > Continuations
> > > > 2 (UofAPress).
> > > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > > > Listen. If (UofAPress):
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > I go down to the Twilight Arcade
> > > > and watch the Martian invaders,
> > > > already appalled by our language,
> > > > pointing at what they want.
> > > >
> > > > Bill Manhire
> > > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > --
> > > Andrew
> > > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > > Books available through Walleah Press
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> > >
> >
>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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