Yes, a sharper seeing there now, Andrew, how the past walks with him there…
Doug
> On Jun 22, 2017, at 8:53 PM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Always a pleasure, Andrew!
>
> On Jun 22, 2017 7:15 PM, "Andrew Burke" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Exactly, Sheila - that's how his life goes. Thank you for that perceptive
>> reading.
>>
>> Andrew
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>> On 23 June 2017 at 09:46, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>> I like this, Andrew. It brings forward a kind of present tense that does
>>> not release its past.
>>>
>>> On Thu, Jun 22, 2017 at 6:21 PM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Just now I passed
>>>> your past address,
>>>> a hollow among
>>>> bushes by the railway.
>>>>
>>>> Now you live
>>>> in the former
>>>> half-way house
>>>> yet walk city streets
>>>> like the homeless
>>>> you once lived among
>>>>
>>>> the pavement
>>>> alleys and buildings
>>>> somehow still
>>>> shape your life
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>>>> On 22 June 2017 at 23:15, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>>> Not quite that bad, Andrew, but I also noticed that ‘passed’, &
>> wonder
>>>> how
>>>>> you might either find another line to make 2 couplets out of that
>>> tercet,
>>>>> or else not worry about stanza breaks at all, at least so ordered
>> then
>>>>> broken once. The observation keeps.
>>>>>
>>>>> Doug
>>>>>> On Jun 22, 2017, at 5:35 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Yes, it's shit Bill. I'll tighten it and fiddle with 'passed' and
>>>> 'past'
>>>>>> ... An unedited snap from my busy brain :-)
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Andrew
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>>>>>> On 22 June 2017 at 18:19, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Line one's 'passed' is odd to me, Andrew. And why the tercet among
>>> the
>>>>>>> couplets? Otherwise this is of interest, the idea of shapes'
>> effect
>>> on
>>>>>>> lives.
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> Bill
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>> On Thu, 22 Jun 2017 at 2:14 PM, Andrew Burke <
>> [log in to unmask]>
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> I drive passed
>>>>>>>> your past address
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> a hollow among
>>>>>>>> bushes by the railway
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> now you live
>>>>>>>> full time
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> in the former
>>>>>>>> half-way house
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> yet walk the city streets
>>>>>>>> like the homeless
>>>>>>>> you once lived among
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> the pavement
>>>>>>>> alleys and buildings
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> somehow shape
>>>>>>>> your life
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>> --
>>>>>>>> Andrew
>>>>>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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>>>>>>>> http://walleahpress.com.au
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>>>>>> --
>>>>>> Andrew
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>>>>>
>>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>>>
>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>>> Continuations
>>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> I go down to the Twilight Arcade
>>>>> and watch the Martian invaders,
>>>>> already appalled by our language,
>>>>> pointing at what they want.
>>>>>
>>>>> Bill Manhire
>>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> --
>>>> Andrew
>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>>> Books available through Walleah Press
>>>> http://walleahpress.com.au
>>>>
>>>
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> Andrew
>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>> Books available through Walleah Press
>> http://walleahpress.com.au
>>
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
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The palms rattle, the eucalypts
shed bark and blossom. Uninterpreted.
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