Like it - altho we pray for rain!
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On 21 June 2017 at 06:17, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Fine indeed, Sharon. The place listing works for me, almost echoing the
> grief running through the body bit by bit, and the way you describe the
> water residuals in the garden is so moving. I'm happy with the abruptness
> of the final line too which breaks up the 'organised' pain before it into
> that simple summary statement of yearning.
>
> Bill
>
> On Wed, 21 Jun 2017 at 3:08 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Yes, it is very fine.
> > I am not sure that you need that final and separate line. I think the
> poem
> > is saying that all the way through
> >
> > L
> >
> > On 20 June 2017 at 17:22, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > > I like this very much, Sharon. Reciprocal weather and personal reality.
> > > Very fine. Sheila
> > >
> > > On Tue, Jun 20, 2017 at 8:40 AM, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> > >
> > > > You leave and then
> > > >
> > > > it rains and rains.
> > > >
> > > > Flood warnings
> > > >
> > > > for Ovando, Seeley
> > > >
> > > > Garnet, Greenough,
> > > >
> > > > Clearwater. The garden
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > glistens, glitter on lilac
> > > >
> > > > leaves in shafts of sun.
> > > >
> > > > I sit alone on the wooden
> > > >
> > > > bench, hood up, smoking,
> > > >
> > > > listening to rain, percussive
> > > >
> > > > on the furnace pipe. This old
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > body hums. My knee aches
> > > >
> > > > and I try to remember where
> > > >
> > > > I put the cane. I remind myself:
> > > >
> > > > weather changes. This land
> > > >
> > > > will be dry again. There will
> > > >
> > > > be drought.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Come back.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > --
> > > > sharon brogan
> > > > http://www.sbpoet.com
> > > > http://www.sbpoet.net
> > > > http://smallpoems.sbpoet.net
> > > > 406.578.1788
> > > >
> > >
> >
>
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Andrew
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