Yes, it is very fine.
I am not sure that you need that final and separate line. I think the poem
is saying that all the way through
L
On 20 June 2017 at 17:22, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I like this very much, Sharon. Reciprocal weather and personal reality.
> Very fine. Sheila
>
> On Tue, Jun 20, 2017 at 8:40 AM, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> > You leave and then
> >
> > it rains and rains.
> >
> > Flood warnings
> >
> > for Ovando, Seeley
> >
> > Garnet, Greenough,
> >
> > Clearwater. The garden
> >
> >
> >
> > glistens, glitter on lilac
> >
> > leaves in shafts of sun.
> >
> > I sit alone on the wooden
> >
> > bench, hood up, smoking,
> >
> > listening to rain, percussive
> >
> > on the furnace pipe. This old
> >
> >
> >
> > body hums. My knee aches
> >
> > and I try to remember where
> >
> > I put the cane. I remind myself:
> >
> > weather changes. This land
> >
> > will be dry again. There will
> >
> > be drought.
> >
> >
> >
> > Come back.
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > sharon brogan
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> >
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