Yeah, knock off the first two lines.
Andrew
On 12 August 2016 at 08:22, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Yes I suppose so. I actually wrote that first stanza last thinking to
> emphasise the moment of arrest but I see your point.
>
> Bill
>
> On Friday, 12 August 2016, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > That moment, caught, Bill. Not sure you need to insert self; could maybe
> > leave off first stanza?
> >
> > Doug
> > > On Aug 10, 2016, at 10:53 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
> > <javascript:;>> wrote:
> > >
> > > Innot Hot Springs
> > >
> > > Crossing the bridge at dusk
> > > when I first hear it.
> > >
> > > Lying back in the creek
> > > hands knees belly protruding
> > >
> > > steam lifting from water
> > > a full-throated chant builds
> > >
> > > from a portly brown body
> > > head thrown back
> > >
> > > A - oo wee aah ohh ...
> > > Native American perhaps
> > >
> > > or Maori. A sound
> > > of total acceptance.
> > >
> > > bw
> > > 11.8.16
> >
> > Douglas Barbour
> > [log in to unmask] <javascript:;>
> > https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >
> > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> > 2 (UofAPress).
> > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >
> > How, but thru a monstrous 'specialism', the so-called authority of
> > erstwhile 'professionals', have we come to leave breath out of images and
> > images out of breath, anyhow?
> >
> > Roy Kiyooka
> >
>
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Andrew
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