five solid quatrains, Bill.
word-play, lively diction, a thought carried through…
glumpy! mmm, struggling with that word before accepting it.
Max
On Apr 5, 2016, at 14:23, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Imagine a declaration of pent-up passion
> to your soul mate greeted with smile spread
> and eye drop. 'That's sweet.' To be seen as sweet
> is to be dismissed as a player. A lower order
>
> nice guy. Sweets come into consideration
> only after the main course, the real deal.
> Or as titbits on the side. Lightweights.
> If so consigned, elevation's doomed.
>
> If I sound like a sourpuss, so be it.
> Sourness sharpens, awakens, challenges.
> The suddenness - and shock - of sour,
> subverts saccharine pleasure. Citrus tang
>
> zips from the word go, cleanses tissues,
> attacks your senses honestly, unlike
> glumpy sweets, taste temptresses whose
> siren call gut-wrecks, lumps you up.
>
> Who'd want to be adjectived sweet? There,
> there, you little sucker. Who'd have thunk
> such an innocent reply could rouse such
> a sour diatribe? Well, at least I'm not bitter.
>
> bw
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