strain indeed, max, andew. will leave it for the moment I think.
Bill
On Wednesday, 2 March 2016, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> ingenious rhyming!
>
> a sense of developing towards the envoi.
>
> As an expert from years of such experience,
> I sense at moments a certain strain in the writing -
> which may be appropriate,
> but which maybe you will alter if you still feel like
> continuing the effort, Bill
>
> Max
>
> On Mar 1, 2016, at 14:30, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
> <javascript:;>> wrote:
>
> > Comes a time when the mid-night piss
> > calls for resolve after weighing up
> > whether to rise or give it a miss.
> > Why'd you accept that second cup?
> > Retirement: you've been sold a pup.
> > Can you lie still, you need to gauge?
> > No, move you must or you'll erupt.
> > Sheer terrorism, this old age.
> >
> > Remember times of nightly bliss
> > when dreams flowed on, no interrupt,
> > your liver cause of no anguish
> > - a full night's sleep, zero hiccups.
> > Now pelvic floor you must develop.
> > Who thought you'd ever reach this stage
> > when nature's call should so disrupt?
> > Sheer terrorism, this old age.
> >
> > Sometimes you'll think nothing's amiss,
> > your bed a field of buttercups.
> > But believe it like an atheist:
> > your body's got its own setup.
> > Sleeps right through it will corrupt.
> > If only you could disengage.
> > The breach in slumber so abrupt.
> > Sheer terrorism, this old age.
> >
> > Envoi
> >
> > Doc, you decide - it's a toss-up:
> > Before another night's outrage,
> > should I go and get a checkup?
> > Sheer terrorism, this old age.
> >
> > bw
>
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