I was going to say, from as to as if, that shift, Jill.
I wonder if you can cut a bit in the 2nd stanza, mainly the ‘it’s’ in the 2nd line really, as the rest is so much a art of that shift taking place…
I like where it takes us…
Doug
On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:42 AM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Jill, "as if," indeed. I like this. I like where it appears to come from.
> It is a evocative of depth.
>
> On Wed, Oct 7, 2015 at 8:28 AM, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> some-else who has dialogues with machines
>>
>> -----Original Message----- From: Jill Jones
>> Sent: Wednesday, October 7, 2015 10:05 AM
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Subject: A Rising Snap
>>
>> A Rising
>>
>>
>>
>> the sky’s getting close to Libra rising
>>
>> it doesn’t seem to have anything to do with balance or beauty
>>
>> is it a hustle, or a joke
>>
>> some kind of maintenance of the mundane
>>
>> another lie like any other lie
>>
>> whatever refusal or dance is needed
>>
>> as the wind suddenly turns into rain
>>
>> then just as suddenly subsides
>>
>> as necessity leads nowhere
>>
>> as effects are simply effects rather than evidence
>>
>> or a lead-in to an argument that might become reason
>>
>>
>>
>> the fridge hums
>>
>> it’s not mimicking the brief rain, it’s a machine
>>
>> but for a moment it almost sounds like
>>
>> a comrade, like a passing train
>>
>> or tinnitus, blood, a pen writing across a page
>>
>> any sound you could befriend
>>
>> anything that sounds like some dialogue
>>
>> you imagined when you imagined
>>
>> walking out into the world
>>
>>
>>
>> as if there were people
>>
>> as if trees grew out of deliberate earth
>>
>> and as if there was such a thing as singing
Douglas Barbour
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