Not sure either adjective is necessary, Bill, so also not sure ‘rolling’ better than ‘mass’…
Otherwise, looks fine in my reception…
Doug
On Sep 11, 2015, at 7:18 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Just testing, poetcers with new email springboard and one word change
> below. Please advise how lines line up.
>
> Dawn hovers,
> faint light brightening.
> Morning horizon
> rupture.
> Lying on its side,
> a giant wine glass
> outlined in vapour strip
> jags expected evenness.
> Sleepy eyes flicker.
> Clouds bleed apart
> so slowly
> spilling
> into roiling white
>
> Kinky Bill (thanks, Pat; better than Cloudy Bill)
Douglas Barbour
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