Well, I think this is an example of the machine failing to do the lines, & I like the linefeed version just fine.
But I see how this smahup sort of renders the surf, but not the surfers…
But I do like the shifts of focus, the moves, Tina..
Doug
On Sep 2, 2015, at 3:06 AM, Tim Allen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I like this, and it works better than the lined one. Not sure about the 'surf ers'
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