Hi Doug,
I liked 'size' there. It was the place I thought the poem was 'casually' moving towards, a sense of amplitude, and a way of disrupting or challenging the expectation of a reader. Anyway, yes, fingers and autocorrect do irritating things. Sometimes I find the error is more useful than the intention, but it's yr poem and fine it is as it now is.
Jill
On 07/08/2015, at 1:04 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> Thanks Jill & Sheila
>
> Aaargh: I certainly thought I typed ‘wise’ there, but my fingers…
>
> Doug
> On Aug 5, 2015, at 7:03 PM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Doug, this is warm and real and true. Great!
>> On Aug 5, 2015 11:29 AM, "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> I’m reading the old guys now
>>> he said looking back
>>> to their age
>>>
>>> a book by a sixty year old
>>> smiling man
>>> that maturity of vision
>>>
>>> read now by one eighty year old
>>> smiling as he tells me
>>> how size their words
>>>
>>> make him feel
>>>
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
>>> (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>
>>> Done in by creation itself.
>>>
>>> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
>>> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
>>> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>>>
>>> Robert Kroetsch.
>>>
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> Done in by creation itself.
>
> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>
> Robert Kroetsch.
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