Thanks, Andrew. I know what you're saying. I do that as well. It was my hope that these current writings were not so opaque. Not that there's anything wrong with abstract painting or the poetry equivalent. But, yes, here's to poetry and its sounds!
Jill
On 20/08/2015, at 1:20 PM, Andrew Burke wrote:
> Yes, Jill, I like a poem which paces the thought not just the breath of the
> creator. Meaning? Part of my habitual thinking still looks for it, but when
> I don't find it, I go back and hang on to the words as they are: like
> reading the paint on an abstract painting. My initial search for meaning is
> a habit which remains from daily reading of the newspaper, etc. & is a drag
> when I approach contemporary poetry!
>
> Andrew
>
> On 20 August 2015 at 09:19, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Hi Patrick,
>>
>> It's definitely all one poem. That's one thing I'm sure of. I suppose it
>> works (with some editing maybe) or it don't (even with editing maybe).
>>
>> And fair enough, it may not be clear in an obvious sense but I am
>> interested in clarity, that is thinking through things, in the George Oppen
>> sense, perhaps.
>>
>> Thanks,
>> Jill
>>
>>
>> On 20/08/2015, at 2:14 AM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>>
>>> Jill I am not sure what is happening -maybe feels like three poems to
>> this old fuddled head!!cheers P
>>>
>>> -----Original Message----- From: Jill Jones
>>> Sent: Wednesday, August 19, 2015 9:13 AM
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Subject: JJ snapping at windows
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> DUD WINDOWS
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Keeping sorry keeps nothing.
>>>
>>> Those leaves you lifted
>>>
>>> from some important breeze
>>>
>>> don’t feel like paper.
>>>
>>> Are they something
>>>
>>> worth discovering?
>>>
>>> Who says otherwise?
>>>
>>> If we know who you are
>>>
>>> if you looked that might
>>>
>>> say different.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> Do we need opinions?
>>>
>>> Who went there once?
>>>
>>> Who do you direct
>>>
>>> your songs unto?
>>>
>>> And who’s listening?
>>>
>>> Who, indeed, stares out
>>>
>>> of windows, looking
>>>
>>> for someone to blame?
>>>
>>> Windows and privileges.
>>>
>>> Dead leaves, dud processes.
>>>
>>> The list goes on.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> I’ll be moving in that direction.
>>>
>>> The one where I trip on my assumptions
>>>
>>> where the concrete’s cracked.
>>>
>>> Because I didn’t fix anything I said
>>>
>>> I’m staring at sky from ground.
>>>
>>> A storm’s coming out of the hills.
>>>
>>> The air changes.
>>
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