Seconded!!
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From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Sheila Murphy
Sent: 25 April 2015 08:00
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: Tire Swing (Wing)
Doug, you are a champ and keeping us on our toes!!! Thanks, Sheila On Apr 24, 2015 9:35 AM, "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Well, I m going to break that consensus up. I felt these commas as
> both little stutter steps,& also a way of putting the phrases in a
> kind of suspension, a bit deeper or back from
>
> All part of the rhythm of the whole piece, I felt
>
> Doug
> On Apr 24, 2015, at 8:39 AM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Thanks, Andrew, we're starting to find consensus. :)
> >
> > Sheila
> >
> > On Fri, Apr 24, 2015 at 1:10 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> >> Like, but am also an anti-brackets person :-)
> >>
> >> Andrew
> >>
> >> On 24 April 2015 at 03:22, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >>
> >>> Thanks, Patrick. Good ideas. You join another reader of mine who
> >>> gets
> >> after
> >>> me re: those brackets. I think I might be wise to listen to what
> >>> you
> say.
> >>> Will inspect this little item and take this seriously!
> >>> Thank you!
> >>>
> >>> On Thu, Apr 23, 2015 at 10:01 AM, Patrick McManus <
> >>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>>
> >>>> Enjoyed this last verse seems not fitting??different? or perhaps
> >>>> leave
> >>> out
> >>>> 'stacked' what's with the brackets??cheers old P
> >>>>
> >>>> -----Original Message-----
> >>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
> >>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
> >> On
> >>>> Behalf Of Sheila Murphy
> >>>> Sent: 23 April 2015 07:18
> >>>> To: [log in to unmask]
> >>>> Subject: Tire Swing (Wing)
> >>>>
> >>>> Alongside (stride
> >>>> rest softens
> >>>> to the west
> >>>> things matter
> >>>>
> >>>> openly away
> >>>> (stray fast
> >>>> to hinge upon
> >>>> (and sing away
> >>>>
> >>>> the sting of fast
> >>>> asleep (the tension
> >>>> falters last
> >>>> before awake time
> >>>>
> >>>> gravity comes
> >>>> framed with
> >>>> fracas stacked unevenly
> >>>> against (the odds
> >>>>
> >>>> Sheila E. Murphy
> >>>>
> >>>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> --
> >> Andrew
> >> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >> 'Undercover of Lightness'
> >> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
> >> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
> >>
> >>
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-p
> ress-shikibu.html
> >>
>
> Douglas Barbour
> [log in to unmask]
>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> There is no life that does not rise
> melodic from scales of the marvelous.
>
> To which our grief refers.
>
> Robert Duncan.
>
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