Thanks, Patrick. Good ideas. You join another reader of mine who gets after
me re: those brackets. I think I might be wise to listen to what you say.
Will inspect this little item and take this seriously!
Thank you!
On Thu, Apr 23, 2015 at 10:01 AM, Patrick McManus <
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> Enjoyed this last verse seems not fitting??different? or perhaps leave out
> 'stacked' what's with the brackets??cheers old P
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Sheila Murphy
> Sent: 23 April 2015 07:18
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> Subject: Tire Swing (Wing)
>
> Alongside (stride
> rest softens
> to the west
> things matter
>
> openly away
> (stray fast
> to hinge upon
> (and sing away
>
> the sting of fast
> asleep (the tension
> falters last
> before awake time
>
> gravity comes
> framed with
> fracas stacked unevenly
> against (the odds
>
> Sheila E. Murphy
>
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