Second version better for this old head glad you got rid of detumesces. Not
sure of last lines -thanks sounds a bit mawkish?(is that the word?)
considering it killed him??
Cheers P -up late!!
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
Behalf Of Bill Wootton
Sent: 02 December 2014 20:58
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: 63 Not Out (version 2)
Before anyone has commented, I had a rethink:
Dead but still
not out: P Hughes.
The Game bigger
than mere living.
A century as they
say, beckoned.
Poor bugger.
But who
could have told:
get clocked
when you stick
your neck out,
your brain
will fade,
weapon crumple,
runs dissolve.
Your Tock
be ticked.
Thanks for
coming, Phil.
bw
3.12.14
|