Thanks Doug for me the cliché of the early morning sun -is set off well in
the next two lines (but what do I know!!)
Earlyish morning sun here -but getting nippyer!
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Sent: 20 November 2014 04:55
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Subject: Re: haikusnap
Either way, Doug, the glisten is got.
Bill
> On 20 Nov 2014, at 2:14 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Chuck the 'the' out. No need to be a slave to the count.
>
> Andrew
>
>> On 20 November 2014 10:32, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Lovely, Doug. I feel it, even hear the visual.
>>
>> On Wed, Nov 19, 2014 at 4:26 PM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
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>>> early morning sun
>>> whiter shading against blue
>>> the thin trees glisten
>>>
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation
>> 2
>>> (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>
>>> that we are only
>>> as we find out we are
>>>
>>> Charles Olson
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>
>
> --
> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> 'Undercover of Lightness'
> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
>
http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-s
hikibu.html
>
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