Thanks, Bill, comment appreciated - the stillness, or moment, in the
movement, was something I was interested in.
J
________________________Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
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The opening two, perhaps three lines nail this poem for me, Jill. The
sense of pre-ordained stillness within that shuffling movement.
Bill
> On 6 Nov 2014, at 6:59 am, Jill Jones wrote:
>
> Good to hear you share my feeling about them. The Stockholm
> underground (tunnelbana) isn't as extensive as classic networks
such
> as the Parisian metro, there are only three lines plus another set
of
> commuter lines, but my journeys on it are quite long getting to the
> uni, and it is certainly packed at most times.
> In Adelaide I did not use a train for year; the system is not big
> either, but I am so glad now our house in Adelaide is on a train
line.
> It feels as if my world is right again.
>
> ________________________Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
>
> ----- Original Message -----
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> Sent:Wed, 5 Nov 2014 12:47:02 -0700
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>
> I absolutely love trains, Jill, and feel that in such motion there
is
> a
> release that brings about a great opening for creating. You've done
a
> gorgeous job here.
>
>> On Wed, Nov 5, 2014 at 12:40 PM, Jill Jones wrote:
>>
>> Many thanks, Sheila. There is something about the moments and
> movement
>> of trains, especially underground systems. Coupled with the fact
of
>> signs advertising a new production of Strindberg's Dance of Death.
>> Which could be worth getting a ticket for, except it is in
Swedish.
>> Jill
>> ________________________Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
>>
>> ----- Original Message -----
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>> Sent:Wed, 5 Nov 2014 11:35:26 -0700
>> Subject:Re: Snap The Dance
>>
>> Jill, I find this moving as a moment in time that encompasses all
>> tenses.
>> Thank you for this. Lovely. Sheila
>>
>>> On Wed, Nov 5, 2014 at 11:04 AM, Jill Jones wrote:
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> THE DANCE
>>>
>>> Minutes hover in trains, everything is
>>>
>>> a forecast from an old future
>>>
>>> the new one is still variable in the making
>>>
>>> a misremembered song from the past
>>>
>>> the girl opposite is nodding her dreamy head
>>>
>>> ‘you are receiving from the year’ of your birth
>>>
>>> of your death, dying on trains while
>>>
>>> the ordnings vakt guys stand by preserving
>>>
>>> old acts of impurity in the name you clean with
>>>
>>> among the tall houses on the east side
>>>
>>> everyone watches to see what kind of soul
>>>
>>> emerges, grey answers, double delicious
>>>
>>> is it about amnesty, painted rainbows
>>>
>>> reading suspended clocks on the red line
>>>
>>> the dödsdansen around the doors
>>>
>>>
>>> ________________________
>>> Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
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