shade of, L
& all that
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On Nov 20, 2014, at 10:06 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I didn't get this and when I saw the comments waited for the original for
> some reason.
> Well, yes, jolly good but why whiteR
> whiter than what?
>
> Lg
>
> On 20 November 2014 16:37, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Thanks, everyone. Actually put it together in my head while driving
>> across our river valley. Only discovered the syllables later, & so could
>> drop the 'the' though I liked its repetition in the line...
>>
>> Yeah: first line cliché but as it was...
>>
>> Anyway, as seen...
>>
>> Doug
>> On Nov 20, 2014, at 4:42 AM, Patrick McManus <
>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> Thanks Doug for me the cliché of the early morning sun -is set off well
>> in
>>> the next two lines (but what do I know!!)
>>> Earlyish morning sun here -but getting nippyer!
>>>
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
>>> Behalf Of Bill Wootton
>>> Sent: 20 November 2014 04:55
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Subject: Re: haikusnap
>>>
>>> Either way, Doug, the glisten is got.
>>>
>>> Bill
>>>
>>>
>>>> On 20 Nov 2014, at 2:14 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Chuck the 'the' out. No need to be a slave to the count.
>>>>
>>>> Andrew
>>>>
>>>>> On 20 November 2014 10:32, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> Lovely, Doug. I feel it, even hear the visual.
>>>>>
>>>>> On Wed, Nov 19, 2014 at 4:26 PM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]
>>>
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> early morning sun
>>>>>> whiter shading against blue
>>>>>> the thin trees glisten
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>>>> [log in to unmask]
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>> Continuation
>>>>> 2
>>>>>> (UofAPress).
>>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>>>
>>>>>> that we are only
>>>>>> as we find out we are
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Charles Olson
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> --
>>>> Andrew
>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>>> 'Undercover of Lightness'
>>>> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
>>>> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
>>>>
>>>
>> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-s
>>> hikibu.html
>>>>
>>>
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> [log in to unmask]
>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
>> (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> that we are only
>> as we find out we are
>>
>> Charles Olson
>>
>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
that we are only
as we find out we are
Charles Olson
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