Like this, L. As you say, a break from rhe fragmentary. The comparison with ageing pets works well and the truth/dirt bit. Should it be will-less? or can you line up three ls, willless? I presume you mean without address, voice or will. The surrounding semicolons jar for me.
The final stanza is superb, needing only a concluding full stop? Or is that withheld while he yet breathes?
Bill
> On 10 Sep 2014, at 10:41 pm, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> I am now almost without energy.
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> Sometimes I twitch! Even walk a little.
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> But then I'm like an ageing pet, spending
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> much of its life resting or quite asleep.
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> I say I'm well, lying in my own dirt,
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> keeping the truth hidden by camouflage.
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> I am without address or voice; will less;
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> no more than light upon a rock, a glint
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> without the power of a spark, flameless
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> yet self-consuming; that which might have been -
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> as leaves may roll themselves, fall, crumble
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> to dust, not even knowing combustion
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