Don't 'drop detail': just refine detail by choosing the most evocative.
(The other half of the creative equation is activated by the reader's
imagination/history.)
Take a look at Lowell's 'Life Studies' as an example, and Bruce Beaver's
'As It Was' (UQP) (as great book!). I'll stop blabbering on now. Just keep
writing them!
Andrew
On 5 June 2014 15:54, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> thanks, Doug, Andrew, Bill -
>
> right now I can't imagine the reader who would persist through a bunch of
> these,
> trimmed or not.
>
> Sprinkle them maybe through a collection with other sorts of poems, change
> of pace,
> and so on.
> I ask myself how many listeners would stay still during a reading of them,
> and for how long, and my hunch is that two poems would be the limit.
> Meantime, yes, tighten and trim...drop detail...
>
> Max in Melbourne
>
> On 5 Jun 2014, at 9:03 am, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Yes, Doug may have a pooint there, Max. I think when you herd many of
> these
> > together you will tighten many of them up - give a sharper focus. Their
> > true perspective comes out in a manuscript.
> >
> > Andrew
> >
> >
> > On 5 June 2014 00:56, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> >> Another memory story, Max, & they seem to get more precise as you enter
> >> into this series...
> >>
> >> I enjoy it for the local references, the sense of NZ then. But it feels
> a
> >> bit like youre trying to get every little detail in, & perhaps dont need
> >> them all...?
> >>
> >> Doug
> >> On Jun 4, 2014, at 5:07 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>
> >>> Card Table, Breakfast Table
> >>>
> >>> When up, the folding card table
> >>> with spindly legs - don't sit on it,
>
--
Andrew
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