Pat as a citizen once of and now near the Wandle I take issue with your
description of its being piddling. Too much re and misdirection; but in its
unaltered state it was a substantial Thames tributary and a major centre of
early industrialisation
L
On 11 June 2014 12:35, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Pat, I laughed. Like the local content too. But you might consider butting
> out one of your buts. Two buts throws readers out. Line 4 could simply
> begin, 'It was' for instance without disarming your flow.
>
> Bill
>
> > On 11 Jun 2014, at 6:39 pm, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > RIVER
> >
> > I am not
> > criticising
> > she said
> > but it was
> > all very well
> > naming our son
> > Moses
> > but isn't it
> > a bit much
> > to make a cradle
> > to tar it
> > to float it
> > in the river
> > after all
> > the Wandle
> > is hardly
> > the Nile
> > and as far
> > as I know
> > there are no
> > Pharaoh's Daughters
> > living in
> > Earlsfield
> >
> >
> > pmcmanus
> > r573
> > some here will know this but
> >
> > River Wandle is a local piddling River
> > Earlsfied -is a sub-suburbia nearby
> > This inspired by partner suddenly taking up a writing course -subject
> 'River
> > Wandle'
> >
>
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