I like the concept of that final stanza, Bill, but 'room elephants' just sounded awkward in my ears...
Doug
On Apr 9, 2014, at 1:57 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Max. Yes an elephant gazing sequel may follow.
>
> Bill
>
> On 09/04/2014, at 11:01 AM, Max Richards wrote:
>
>> I like the alphabetical order, Bill:
>> Ch then Cu,
>> and from Wh to Wo…
>>
>> I once posted a tiny verse lament and not
>> being in the bookshops between
>> Raworth and Rilke.
>>
>> Presumably this year's journal is the latest
>> of a great many - all kept and in order?
>>
>> These lines of yours achieve a certain tone and form.
>> Maybe a sequel is called for - once some elephant
>> gets tended to…
>>
>> Max
>>
>> On 09/04/2014, at 7:20 AM, Bill Wootton wrote:
>>
>>> Between The Children
>>> and The Custom of the Country
>>> lies the journal of my days.
>>>
>>> Plucked before breakfast
>>> from its enclosing Whartons,
>>> pages bent back ready for pen.
>>>
>>> Pen hovers rarely, inclining
>>> more to jump to ready blather,
>>> or opens with dreams
>>>
>>> recalled, dismembered,
>>> assembled, disappearing
>>> as they empty on to page.
>>>
>>> Mornings recount yesterdays,
>>> rarely anticipations. More
>>> often lists, summings up.
>>>
>>> What questions avoided,
>>> what room elephants
>>> unexamined.
>>>
>>> bw
>>> 9.4.14
>>
>
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