I agree about the ballad-like feel of the piece, Bill. To keep that throughout...
Another country, another time, eh...
Doug
On Mar 19, 2014, at 4:35 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Pat, Andrew, Ken. I felt that too, Ken about the latter lines getting too leggy and will work on them. Katy I have not clapped eyes on for twenty years at least. The last time was at a mutual friend's place who was staging a croquet party on his extensive back lawn. It was a BYO bottle of spirits. Katy's new boyfriend collapsed over a table of bottles some time during the night. Ambulance involved.
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> Bill
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>> On 19 Mar 2014, at 8:25 am, Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> I'm concerned only by the shift to long lines after so many ballad-like
>> lines before. For the rest, it's lovely. I've had a Katy or two in my life,
>> and this makes me reminiscent.
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>> Ken
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