Thanks Doug, I hadn't thought of that. I may revise it into a six line poem. Barry
On Thu, 13 Feb 2014 10:16:20 -0700, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>Of course, one problem, barry, is that Patrick & I might pronounce that penultimate line very differently than you would...(or just a snore sound...).
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>however much I like the rest...
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>Doug
>On Feb 13, 2014, at 5:29 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Barry Alpert
>> Sent: 13 February 2014 00:21
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>> Subject: Crazy Snap
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>> GUN CRAZY
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>> via Joseph H. Lewis & Dalton Trumbo
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>> Got him a brand new bb gun.
>> U think I can't shoot when I want to.
>> No guts. Nothing. I want action.
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>> COCKTAIL BAR CAFE
>> Ran into a bad streak>>
>> A stick-up man staring back at me . . .
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>> Yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
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>> Barry Alpert / Wash DC > Rockville MD / 2-12-14 (7:14PM)
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>> http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z67ECNKY2mI
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