Andre de Riverina,
Not working for the man or the Maggie any more, so i'd better bone up on my iambics. Chores I'm not short of.
Cheers,
Bill
On Mon, Sep 23rd, 2013 at 11:39 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Good subject to approach, my fellow retiree. My wife worries I may become
> chairbound so she has me doing a million chores a day! Ho hum, probably
> good for me, huh.
>
> Apropos, just listening to Ben Sidran drawl out Maggie's Farm ... 'Ain't
> gunna work on ... anymore.'
>
>
> Andre de Riverina
>
>
>
> On 19 September 2013 10:31, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > I didn't think it was too 'free', Doug. Haven't I been rigid in using
> > abbaabbaefgefg rhymes and lines in iambic pentameter? Or are my
> pentameters
> > not iambic? Or are my iambs not pentameters? I don't really know enough
> at
> > that level.
> >
> > Fair cop on the 'ises', I suppose but I just wanted to maintain a kind
> of
> > vernacular in the argument. I tried 'Why does everything I want to do
> > count/as a commitment?' for instance but the line turn seemed forced and
> it
> > lost its feeling of pathetic insistence I thought. I have since tried
> just
> > 'Why is everything I want to do/a commitment' which seems to address
> your
> > beef but again, I seem to have lost some ... tone - is that what I
> mean?
> >
> > Thanks, as usual for making me rethink what I am trying to do.
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On 19/09/2013, at 12:27 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > > Ha, but even in a sonnet,Bill, since it's already a bit 'free,' you
> > could probably cut a few of the 'is's, especially in the first
> quatrain,
> > out…?
> > >
> > > Retirement = trad? Or something…?
> > >
> > > Doug
> > > On 2013-09-18, at 2:16 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
> > >
> > >> Free rigidity
> > >>
> > >> Why is it everything I want to do
> > >> is a 'commitment'? It's freedom you seek,
> > >> you say: blank spaces in the coming weeks.
> > >> It's not like I'm proposing a tattoo;
> > >> surely we can accept a barbecue.
> > >> It's not too long a drive to Pheasant Creek.
> > >> Distance? It may as well be Mozambique.
> > >> Openings, parties, movies, toodle-oo!
> > >> Retirement from work should open doors,
> > >> Invitations confirmed, no longer spurned.
> > >> Open-ended readiness is strange hell.
> > >> Whither spontaneity? always your
> > >> riposte, which only serves to make me squirm.
> > >> Can double lines once crossed re-parallel?
> > >>
> > >> bw
> > >> 18.09.13
> > >
> > > Douglas Barbour
> > > [log in to unmask]
> > >
> > > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuation
> > 2 (UofAPress).
> > > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> > >
> > > Something else is out there
> > > godamnit
> > >
> > > And I want to hear it
> > >
> > > C.D.Wright
> > >
> >
>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
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