Okay. Good luck.
On 5 August 2013 20:25, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Andrew
>
> the prosy dangling bits are there for deliberate and bathetic effect; it's
> a matter of the idea of formality opposing its own content. I suspect it
> needs to go further down that road myself. Never trust anything beginning
> with the crowded pronoun from little old me. Kind of. Like.
>
>
> On 5 August 2013 07:10, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Listen, Jumpin' Jack Flash, let the form have something to do with
> > expressing the content - jump it around! And through out all those
> > connective preps and conjunctions and stuff, so necessary for formal
> prose,
> > but if its gunna jump, let it off like a string of firecrackers ... Don't
> > pander to the reader; let the reader jump with you (a la Count Basie or
> > Rashan Rashan) .
> >
> > Go. Break yr habits (the tarpit, as Johnny Tranter would have it). Take
> > brisk risks :-)
> >
> > Andrew
> >
> >
> >
> > On 5 August 2013 14:12, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > > I like 'us,/a little jumpy current on the wires', David. Otherwise, the
> > > whole thing sounds good in its jumpy way but i may be missing
> something.
> > >
> > > Bill
> > >
> > > On 05/08/2013, at 11:49 AM, David Bircumshaw wrote:
> > >
> > > > this is the first poem I've written for months, and is probably
> > rubbish.
> > > > But I thought I'd share it. it could be retitled 'Back problems'.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Injurious
> > > >
> > > > We are nations, empires, histories,
> > > > and a kind of sponge-bag in the plunge
> > > > of a socket-skull, and wiring, such chatty wriggling,
> > > > like the huge scrawled signatures of the mad,
> > > >
> > > > that cling to a spiny skewer, kebab. That’s us,
> > > > a little jumpy current on the wires, a dumb waiter
> > > > on auto-mantic, a glob of philosophy rising
> > > > from a puddle, a short circuit round the crown,
> > > > its temple and the much-turned spine.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > best
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > --
> > > > David Joseph Bircumshaw
> > > > **
> > > > Website and A Chide's Alphabet
> > > > http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk
> > > > The Animal Subsides
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> > > >
> > >
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > 'Undercover of Lightness'
> > http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
> > 'Shikibu Shuffle'
> >
> >
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-shikibu.html
> >
>
>
>
> --
> David Joseph Bircumshaw
> **
> Website and A Chide's Alphabet
> http://www.staplednapkin.org.uk
> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
> Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/david.bircumshaw
> twitter: http://twitter.com/bucketshave
> blog: http://groggydays.blogspot.com/
> Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.com
>
--
Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
'Undercover of Lightness'
http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
'Shikibu Shuffle'
http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-shikibu.html
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