Actually, although I'm not sure of the intro back there, I like them all, David, for the shifts from one to other, for the slipperiness of syntax in that 2nd one, for bnits like 'the threshold of glim.' & that final line.
The 'I's do interesting work when looked at in all 3. But I would have broken the first line of the first one, which stood out there...
Doug
On 2013-08-10, at 11:45 AM, David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Anyhow, as I have now been educated in the unbelievably high standards of
> writing this list now maintains, I wonder if I could trespass, without
> pandering to the reader, and offer a fragment, 'a bit off the old chock',
> as Johnny Armpit once said. Remember, there's more than meets the aye-aye:
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>
> As the minute waltz prolongs its existence on the radio, I am pondering
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> an essay on porcupines. Almost unknown to me, yet familiar
>
> from childhood, like gryphons, etaines, and karantongs.
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> The magic hall beasts
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>
>
> of believing seeing. To be
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> on the borders of a page, or the threshold of glim.
>
> I met a rock-climber once, who believed that the summits
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> were still being born, surprised among the names, falling out of heads.
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>
>
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