Moving, Max. Just wonder whether the 'leg pain' reference in stanza two is a distraction from where the poem is going. Also, would you consider replacing 'there' in stanza 4 with 'present'?
Bill
On 14/08/2013, at 10:42 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thermostat
>
>
> The bedroom heater whirred
> till, reaching its set
> temperature,
> it cut out.
>
> He woke to leg pain.
> She was crying again,
> quietly so as not
> to disturb him.
>
> The two dogs on their beds
> nearby also stirred,
> one whimpered -
> some doggy dream.
>
> He, though always there,
> knew what broke her was
> her solitude,
> her loneliness.
>
> His hand reached her shoulder,
> she answered his touch,
> a sort of company,
> if not much.
>
> The bedroom heater
> registered a drop
> in temperature,
> and whirred again,
>
> warming all four
> in the room
> till reaching its
> regulated stop.
>
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